So I just checked out the piece! For some reason, (maybe because it's already published?) it isn't allowing me to add a private comment. I figured that rather than comment on the post directly It'd be a little less public to mention it here. Overall very good piece! The only things I'd mention: I think the first sentence could read simply, "Iris had never met anyone so fascinated by color." I thought "she didn't get truly bad vibes from him..." was a little less descriptive than the rest of the piece. Also, I was a little unsure what you meant by "both of them" at the end. All and all great writing though! I went ahead and published it.